Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with family and friends or a lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.
The significance of high paying jobs is prolonging even though it holds long hour working all over the world as some common belief influence us to seek money for a better, comfortable and luxurious living. The long time works in the highly paid jobs also result in the degradation of relations as the workers of such jobs have a shorter time for friends, families, and relatives. However, I have a great endorse in the long period workings if it pays highly. My next sentences will explore the reasons why I have a intension to join these types of jobs.
First and foremost, a closer look at the functions of the high-paying jobs denotes that the worker has to involve in official activities all long to accomplish the core activities such as making files, official meetings, communications, monitoring and to name a few. I think that these activities will enhance my working and cognitive capability. As a result, I can maintain a routined and disciplined lifestyle. In addition, the long time laboring in the office will assist me to handle the intricate situations, for example, how to come back quckly if a plan fails, how to work handle the conflict among the coworkers etc. The convoluted experiences will provide me a matured tendency to go ahead ignoring the impediments. Moreover, it is bitter truth that nobody can bring a charismatic success in a smooth way, so I'm ready to take such challenges to reach a peak of success.
Furthermore, It is a bitter truth that money is the determinant of happiness, bonding and social status. If I have money, I can comforward to help my friends, neighbor, families at their hard times. Otherwise, I cannot do anything rather it will deliberately lead me and my surrounding people to a exploitation. Short timing jobs may give me a temporary comfort, can releave my from hard working, but it cannot ensure power, happiness. The real well wishers like friends, parents, wives or children need some good moments despite there are lots of busy people who allot time for these persons after all.
In conclusion, the aforesaid explanations inspire me to desire a long time work which pays highly so that I can ensure a better future besides allotting some times for my close persons. I think, it is not necessary to join small works to give time people, it depends on intent
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... nobody can bring a charismatic success in a smooth way, so Im ready to take such challenges to...
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Message: Did you mean 'reaching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: reaching
...ay, so Im ready to take such challenges to reach a peak of success. Furthermore, It ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, after all, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82957393484 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81508641576 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573934837093 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7377075374 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.352941176 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1176470588 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147842357635 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453661781877 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467172143058 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099978365369 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454670713641 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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