one who cannot accept others' criticism becomes successful in group
With the advent of human modern society, the number of individuals participating is group activities has been exponentially increased due to the fact that a majority of tasks should be accomplished by some people. In regard to this issue an important controversial question is posed that whether or not one who cannot accept others' criticism becomes successful in group. A plethora of people believe that being prosperous has nothing to do with accepting criticism, but I, to a great extent, take the issue that it most likely have inevitable impact on this matter. My reasons are manifold, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is that listening to other members' pieces of advice play a pivotal role in increasing one's information and knowledge. One of the most significant merits of group activity is learning a lot from other persons. In other words, ones participating in a team possess a great opportunity to gain their knowledge in comparison to another one working alone since during a teamwork members learn from each other, either consciously or unconsciously. Therefore, neglecting other ones' recommendation and criticism most probably leads to some consequent serious problems. To clarify the point, consider a clerk as a group member acts separately from others and does not put any value on coworkers' perspectives. This person is not able to solve his problems and correct his mistakes. As a result, he faces difficulties and success becomes far-reaching.
Beyond a shadow of a doubt, we cannot turn a blind eye to the importance of one's performance on the team success. As a matter of fact, each individual plays his role as a member of group, no matter what his role is, and hence, he greats a part of puzzle of work. Therefore, any blame has its domino effects, and ultimately, it results in a terrible failure for the team. Needless to say, all member fail in this situation. For instance, player, members of a soccer team, cannot succeed as an individual person, on the grounds that their performance is just noticeable when they work together and reach their goal. Briefly, the more successful a team, the more prosperous its members.
To sum up, considering the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that human being should listen and accept criticism from others, especially other members of the same group, in order to become prosperous in the future. Not only does it augment his information and knowledge, but it also influences on the group success. Overall, it is highly recommended that person makes attempt to correct his flaws and defects which are stated by other people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, in regard to, to sum up, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2287.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09354120267 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95408587889 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552338530067 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4765086987 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.35 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.45 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352559886017 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100581554568 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11325216513 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214923702013 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727145371805 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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