The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Fame is something a lot of people sought after. The idolization of people to celebrities can be very intriguing. One main thing that can be attractive in the life of famous people is their voices are heard. when a celebrity shares their opinion -regardless of their expertise on the subject- everyone pays attention, especially younger generation. I believe that younger people are more affected by celebrities’ opinions than older people for two main reasons.
First, young people, especially teenagers, look for idols to follow, which is usually someone famous. Due to their lack of experience, they will be affected by their love to their idols to analyze the opinion badly. For instance, we can look at the musical phenomenon created by the singer billie eilish. billie eilish is a very famous singer and idolized by young girls. when examining the activity of billie on social media we can almost always correlate a trend in a topic to her sharing her opinion on it.
Furthermore, the main reason older people are not affected by celebrities’ opinions is that they accumulated experience throughout their lives. this experience can help them to base their judgement on the argument made by the opinion and the expertise of the author.
To conclude, I believe that younger people are usually affected by the opinions of famous people. While this may sound bad, it can be put to good use. it is the celebrities’ moral obligation to recognize the effect they have on the young generation and use it to the better of the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1301.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 258.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04263565891 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90736173161 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515503875969 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2685949837 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238342812697 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883348015849 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895494289398 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153153106252 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511698018593 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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