In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?

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In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?

This term of period is so much of globalization and travelling over the world is piece of cake when compared to before. It's no wonder that some country enormously rely on the outcome of tourism. And also, there must be some degree of merge of it's own benefit between areas. Therefore, its approach to tourist would vary each place.
So that, I think that a means of attracting tourist will differ from depend on the situation of the town and how much of people they desire to be visiting.
As one country start to want people to come and visit, which is not have had significant number of them, it's better to fix old buildings and develop the condition of those, in order to make it look beautiful and worthy to visit to see by tourist.
In considering people whose aim to travel to one place, they likely have some plan to go to famous sightseeing place or visit local historical buildings in there during their trip. Even me when consider to go on the trip to some different town, at first, I always come across looking for several information of well-visited location and recommended one to visit on online.
Thus Repairing current old building for making it stand for good worthy appearance, which attract many tourist most, is merely the best way to obtain considerable number of people.
In other hand, as for ones wish to have more tourist than before, it's perhaps most effective means that they improve a society with certain safety by a cooperation with the police.
If there are already a lot of people having a great time by going around leisurely in there and those coming the place for a particular reason. I insist that, in the top of queue, the local organization or government must protect them from any possibility danger for tourist's sake. Moreover, improving safety in the area relates with encouraging the tourist's motivation to easily to visit there. Take one friend of mine, Erina as an example. She's planning to go on a short trip somewhere for a week and eventually decided to visit some traditional temples in Tochigi. However, only a few days before her departure to Tochigi, she found the distinct is not as safety as she thought because there seems few accident and trouble she get concern badly. Without saying that, she turned to be going to another place instead of following a previous plan.
Hence, they must prevent beforehead any accident and bad happening by the local solid security and show people the reliable safety. These effort will contribute to increasing a rate of tourist in the long term of period.
Japan is also one of the country, greatly getting famous tourism place nowadays and it seems that our government try hard to attract people as well as welcoming them to our characteristic culture in their best. Seeing all abuzz with variety of government's proposals day-to-day, there are sometime unfavorable idea whose it appears to influence on us in some ways but surely. Beside, it also gives me wonder of what tourism is truly like.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... piece of cake when compared to before. Its no wonder that some country enormously ...
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Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider going', 'consider gonna'.
Suggestion: consider going; consider gonna
...n there during their trip. Even me when consider to go on the trip to some different town, at ...
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Line 4, column 290, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some information'.
Suggestion: some information
...first, I always come across looking for several information of well-visited location and recommende...
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Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tourists'' or 'tourist's'?
Suggestion: tourists'; tourist's
...n the area relates with encouraging the tourists motivation to easily to visit there. Ta...
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Line 7, column 444, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: She's
...ne friend of mine, Erina as an example. Shes planning to go on a short trip somewher...
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Line 7, column 703, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun accident seems to be countable; consider using: 'few accidents'.
Suggestion: few accidents
...fety as she thought because there seems few accident and trouble she get concern badly. With...
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Line 7, column 732, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...here seems few accident and trouble she get concern badly. Without saying that, she...
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Line 8, column 133, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this effort' or 'These efforts'?
Suggestion: This effort; These efforts
...ty and show people the reliable safety. These effort will contribute to increasing a rate of...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...der of what tourism is truly like.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, i think, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2520.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85549132948 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56057113071 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566473988439 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8035694073 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.545454545 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5909090909 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132420787153 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032871779324 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042547418895 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0610113041696 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048792986558 0.0645574589148 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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