In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?

Essay topics:
In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?

This time of a period is so much globalization and traveling over the world is piece of cake when compared to before.
It’s no wonder that some country enormously relies on the outcome of tourism.
Each county owns a different amount of its benefit from tourism. Therefore, there would be many different ways to attract travelers at each place.
As one country that wants to fulfill its deficient tourism's rate, the country's better to work on developing their buildings conditions in order to make those olden appearances worthy by tourists.
For instance, one country focusing on enhancement of its urban districts, when the government has done mending the public institutions at each town such as main streets and its side of the buildings, business hotels, local train stations etc.
Most people would get interested in its refined phenomenon and rather come to see the whole well-repaired buildings.
On the other hand, as for ones that wish to have more tourists than before, the national organization should enforce its safety with local polices. That'd contribute to obtaining a promising amount of tourists at any given time.
If they could show people the safety is reliable, for example, installing more security cameras, expanding night police's patrols, they would feel much secure to travel around and be willing to go there.
Japan is now one of world-famous trip place, especially Tokyo and Kyoto is largely loved as its own unique traditional culture by travelers. Regarding the result of the current up-rush by people, I've seen a way many foreigners comparing to at my childhood, and the government's eager to gain further tourists. They've been working hard to do so though, however new charging system they've recently proposed seems such irony because we are ordering tourists charging at their departure. Sometimes our government's tourism polices went to an awkward phase like the new operation. But it's true that I'm surely happy for this Japanese boom.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, for instance, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22955974843 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78927272318 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.524837075471 127% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2041516853 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.866666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185835542876 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516768597456 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413139211339 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0634069551971 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427465776231 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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