If you could make one important change in a school you attended, what changed would you make? Use reasons and specific example to support your answer.
There are many of moral rules and demands based on own policies in school and those restricting student's life sometimes appears to be unfair and disagreeable needs for any student in some way. If I could make such an essential change in my school, I definitely would opt for "dress up day" for specific holiday such as Halloween, Christmas and so on. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
My first reason to be mentioned is that hilarious and unique dress cord day can offer students with a more effective way to vent their daily stress coming from perpetual exams. Furthermore, the result of this event is not only stress-free student but also happier student who are satisfied with the school(even though I made the change) as held this leisure day! Take myself as an example. When I was in Irish school as an exchange student, the school held Christmas party as dressing down at school. While the leisure party, most student seem happier than as classroom facing to own desk and the school got the boatload of pleasant feedback from all the student.
Another reason which deserve some word here is that with this implementation of the school to make enjoyable time for students, it will remarkably contribute to their postures toward class activities.In clear language, the more enjoyment the more intelligence. For instance, the intelligible statistics, which are revealed by a recent research shown that, in fact, a 81 percent of high school students who periodically spend some time for own relish and interest are prone to gaining great score than those who is focus on only studying because the enjoyment plays a vital rules in human being activity, especially in adolescent lives.
In a nutshell, the influence of the positive occurrence in their precious high school life will gladden <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">most of the students.</span>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1064516129 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02710784312 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616129032258 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.8552991565 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.3 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984531042983 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408943738005 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427893260721 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0574971468745 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318842023283 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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