parents should be more involved with their kids in planning how to use their time
No one can deny that balance is the key to success in life. Therefore, parents should balance between give instructions to their kids to make use of their time and support them to make their choices independently. In my view, I agree with the claim in the sentences and I will explore in the following article.
First, parents should support their children through their childhood to create a strong, independent child. Parents may push their kids to be involved in learning activities instead of wasting time watching tv shows or playing video games. For example, my boy is 8 years old. Lately, he begins to waste his time watching useless tv-shows. Therefore, I enrolled him through karate classes to learn self-defense and build a healthy body. Meanwhile, I noticed that his behavior has been changed to become self-confident and cooperative
Second, kids may be affected by their friends or neighbors. They may learn good or bad issues, therefore, parents should be there to advise them if they get involved in problems. For example, I remember when I was 18 years old, I met a new friend called Jessica. My mom always advised me to leave her because she was a trouble maker, we always had arguments regarding her. Later, Jessica involved in a terrible problem in the school and then I realized that my mother was right about her.
In conclusion, kids may have their own space to plan for their future or to make what they want. On the other hand, parents should be there to advise and support them. They have to learn how to be independent to build the ability to resolve their problems in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to become self-confident and cooperative Second, kids may be affected by their fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77142857143 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59944067767 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578571428571 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5282929732 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424445537961 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118519327079 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117961231886 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257889878142 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725945159148 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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