parents should encourage their children to take part-time jobs
The material discusses that the ancient Greeks used a specific weapon called burning mirror to fight aganist the Romans. While the reading looks at the topic from one prespective, the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
First, the author claims that the ancient Greeks were not technologically advanced to create this weapon. On the other hand, the professor opposes this and states that the Greeks did not use single sheet od copper to manufacture an individual precise mirror,but they used assemble many small mirrors to from perebolic shap mirror.
Second, the reading posites that this weapon was ineffective becasue it took long time to fire a ship. On the contrary, the listening contradicts this and says that if the ship just made of wood, it could take ten minute to fire it; however, the ship usually made of many pices of wood that sealed together with a particular waterproof material called peatch. The professor adds that this material could catch fire in second, then the fire could spread even the ship was moving.
Third, the author states that the Greeks already had falming arrows, so it was not a creative weapon. Conversely, the lecturer challenges this and states that both Greeks and Romans were familiar with flaming arrows and they could watch it, nevertheless, they could expect that a mirror could be a weapon it was just a mirror. The professor adds that the fire suddenly come from the mirror and surprise the enemies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...specific weapon called burning mirror to fight aganist the Romans. While the read...
^^
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...manufacture an individual precise mirror,but they used assemble many small mirrors t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, then, third, while, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 247.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02429149798 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4486330672 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534412955466 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 370.8 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0745291983 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 5.45110844103 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0172290462912 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00782124651667 0.076458572812 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0162663192372 0.0737576698707 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00876805834168 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151867225315 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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