Do you agree or dsagree?
Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children's future for them.
Raising children to face the myriad challenges of adulthood and surviving the hurdles set through life is one of the main concerns of all parents. That what is the most sensible course of action in raising responsible children has always been a contentious issue. Some people hold the notion that parents should intervene in their children's decisions because they possess the foresight of what works best for their children. Whereas some have an alternative perspective that parents should allow their children to make choices of their own. In this regard, I agree with the latter group for several reasons that will be delved into deeper in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, letting children decide independently enables them to enhance their analytical thinking and decision-making skills. Since children from a very young age are dependent on their caregivers for survival, they often feel helpless and frustrated. Hence, providing children with conditions that enable them to choose freely between different options helps them to gain control over their lives and feel less overwhelmed. Moreover, suppose this dependency process goes on for a prolonged period. In that case, children's independent decision-making ability can be affected to the point that they would not be able to choose between any options and constantly vacillate between possible choices and uncertainties. For example, studies by a university in my hometown have revealed that parents who preclude their children from making any measures and decisions to protect them hurt their children's mental development and sanity more than those parents who provide their children with opportunities to decide for their life. These dependent children always impede themselves from taking risks and expect the bare minimum, which is often determined by others for them through different stages of life. Moreover, the study indicated that these dependent children are less creative because they have been accustomed to others solving their problems, which is a serious flaw for adults.
Furthermore, practicing decision-making processes from a young age helps children to grow as responsible adults who can take and face the responsibility of their own decision, all of which can help them become beneficial members of society. Parents, by providing their children with a safe environment to decide, can enhance their sense of responsibility because children will grow to learn that no matter what the outcome of their decision is, they are the ones in charge and they are the ones who should face the consequences, no matter positive or negative. For example, one of my cousins was raised in a very dependent household, to the point that his parents protected him from the negative impacts of all of his mal deeds. They decided for him what to study, where to live, and even who to marry. Unfortunately, he could not lead a prosperous life because he could not make decisions of his own. Even the slightest inconvenience hit him hard, and he could not take responsibility for his decisions.
To recapitulate, for one to grow into a responsible adult who can make decisions independently and face the consequences of the decisions, one must be involved in the process of decision-making from the early stages of life. Had it not been for the support and instructions of our parents from the early stages, we could not have been able to make the most critical decisions of our lives. I believe it is best for the parents to provide a supportive environment for their children and to let them know that no matter what their children decide, their love for them is unconditional. Then, children will have enough self-esteem to take measures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 426, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of what works best for their children. Whereas some have an alternative perspective th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, then, whereas, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3124.0 1977.66487455 158% => OK
No of words: 599.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21535893155 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89404475632 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449081803005 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 960.3 618.680645161 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6210682118 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.826086957 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0434782609 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78260869565 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425658391263 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138669933499 0.076458572812 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116459209183 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301223853667 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738444873524 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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