Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.
The cycle of life is going through myriad failures again and again to gain prosperity. No single success is achieved without facing a plethora of hurdles and difficulties. That Maintaining a jubilant spirit when you fail is way more important than achieving success has long been an issue of controversy. In this regard, some people believe in the thereof statement, whereas others hold an alternative conviction. In my sense, Keeping your spirit high during failure plays a more significant role.
To commence with, humans are inherently perfectionists. Meaning that their avaricious spirits do not allow them to settle for good. When they achieve their goal, they will set a new life purpose and always want more of life. Thus, settling for achievements to do away with coping with failure and hurdles, contradicts human nature, brings nothing but depression and feeling vehemently hollow, and finding life absurd. In addition, no success and prosperity is obtained without facing problems. As a result, it is important to be optimistic through this process and never give up. As an example, once I read a biography of an eminent business figure who had developed a very famous dating app which really went viral. After some years of making a good profit, he thought that he is done with the business and decided to retire for good. The new CEO of the company who purchased the app made lots of changes to the app and gained even more profit. On the grounds of the existing technology and data of that app, the new CEO was able to gain even more prosperity. However, the former owner of the app started a route that inevitably ended in an abyss. Because he thought that his only success was ample for the rest of his life, he give up on trying to achieve more success and after some time of taking rest he found the whole idea of life preposterous and committed suicide. This example illustrates how acting against human nature, which is going through several difficulties to achieve success repeatedly, can lead to detrimental and irreversible effects.
Moreover, mental health has a very close correlation with physical health. Several studies conducted by researchers have proved that when one is happy and optimistic, their overall physical health conditions improve as well. As the old and famous saying goes healthy body is the result of a sane mentality. Therefore, It is made crystal clear being happy through the numerous failures that one encounters in pursuit of success, is essential. In a study conducted at my university, it was shown that a positive mentality in the work environment, especially for those that deal with chronic stress and challenging issues, helped people maintain good physical terms, which in return resulted in more work efficiency and more prosperity.
To recapitulate, I also hold the perspective that maintaining happiness and optimism upon failure is more important than achieving success since there is no straight route to success and one must fail to succeed. The intrinsic perfectionist trait of human nature requires overcoming failures, which is impossible unless one is optimistic. Furthermore, the close correlation between physical and mental health and their impact on efficacy and prosperity leaves no doubt to believe in the thereof statement. I mean who can neglect the importance of keeping calm while trying and failing and making progress?
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Suggestion: gives
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, i mean, in addition, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2850.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11669658887 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77458228277 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538599640934 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 892.8 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4661584313 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.555555556 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6296296296 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18518518519 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2582778387 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600510267626 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687531852212 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155456449436 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442391356948 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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