A company wants to use the money to help employees work better. One way is to improve the technology equipment (computers, printers) used by employees and improve efficiency. Another way is to redesign the space to make the working environment more comfortable and have more meeting rooms for discussion. Which way do you recommend? Why?
There exist myriad paths by which efficacy in the workplace can be promoted and enhanced. That which way leads to a more prolific work environment has always been a contentious issue. Some people hold the conviction that upgrading the equipment can be a good impetus for employees to work better; on the other hand, others have an alternative perspective and notion that renovating and optimizing the space where the employees work and hold meetings can play a far more significant role. To my best knowledge, the design of the environment can be of better aid in this stance for several reasons that will be expounded in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, the environment one spends time has a direct impact on their mentality and efficacy. In fact, if one works in a bleak environment, an environment that is packed with tedious furniture and partitions with nowhere to refer to when taking a break, their mood can substantially degrade. Even when they get tired, they have nowhere else to go to take a break from the suffocating and gloomy environment. Thus, all this disheartens and discourages people from working passionately since all they want to do is just hurriedly do their responsibilities to flee away from their workplace. A survey conducted by a university in my hometown revealed that renovation and optimization of the work environment, adding some greeneries, and improving the aesthetic outlook of the space can enhance the proficiency of workers by 70%. Because workers are not frustrated by the gloomy work environment and the new designs have provided employees with some cozy places to unwind and revitalize when they feel tired, they tend not to leave the office early and feel refreshed and motivated all along.
Furthermore, the optimized design of the work environment and meeting rooms can lead to better communication among office employees, as well as visitor entrepreneurs. New studies in the field of interior design and architecture have revealed that open area designs can increase the rapport among colleagues and endow a better means of communication. Nevertheless, closed spaces, such as small office rooms or even worth suffocating cubicles, act as barriers to the free flow of communication. For instance, when our company decided to renovate the old building and create some open areas for workers, people communicated more readily. When someone encountered a challenge or problem, experienced workers can get involved and help resolve the issue with less effort and frustration. In addition, due to the modern look of the environment, the interaction between different businesses with our company took a giant leap as well. This look makes others believe the company is not stuck in the past. Unlike its old history, it can go with the flow and implement modern methods, all of which help build a more trust-based relationship with other companies and higher success rates for the company itself.
To recapitulate, due to the better flow of communication in the modern designs and the revitalizing sense that these new designs bring along, the efficacy of workers can enhance substantially. On the other hand, adding only new devices when the physical infrastructure has deteriorated dramatically cannot be as much of an assistance in increasing efficiency. People's mental health and social interactions are far more important than state-of-the-art technology. Had it not been for the convenient work environment of most renowned companies like Google, these companies would not have been able to be so much prosperous. Who can ignore the impact of the appropriate setting after all these reasons?
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Suggestion:
...priate setting after all these reasons?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, nevertheless, so, thus, well, after all, as for, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 8.0752688172 347% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3073.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23509369676 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05090424001 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505962521295 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 959.4 618.680645161 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6585674204 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.608695652 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5217391304 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183129038957 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050663744268 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484340492105 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112225492919 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433005336707 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 86.8835125448 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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