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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.

With the labor-intensive economy giving its way to a more education-focused economy, the importance of higher-level education and engagement in tertiary institutions has been on the rise. This has, in return, led to issues on how one can be well-prepared for landing in better jobs. In this regard, some people hold the notion that students should be involved in part-time jobs while studying to get the idea of having an occupation and familiarize themselves with the work environment challenges. Whereas some have an alternative perspective that students should merely focus on their studies to get the most out of it. To my best knowledge, the latter group's conviction makes more sense, and students should devote their time to studying.

To commence with, universities are places that bridge the gap between high school and the workplace. Through studying in universities, students are endowed with the required knowledge and skills to land proper jobs. Acquiring this knowledge and hands-on experience is demanding and requires commitment. These part-time jobs impede students from putting all of themselves into studying and absorbing all the knowledge by occupying students' time and enervating their energy. For example, one of my friends was really ardent about acting, and she got into a great art school. She decided to have a part-time job as a salesperson to gain some experience and improve her social skills, which she thought could also benefit her acting career. Nevertheless, she ended up always being tired, even to the point that she skipped some classes to rest since she had a hectic schedule. The outcome was obvious; she ended up failing many classes, and the part-time job only provided her with mental and physical lethargy. Were it not for the part-time job, she could have been more successful.

Furthermore, some would argue that these part-time jobs can be influential since they endow a hands-on experience to students, give a peck into reality, and can be good financial aid. Nonetheless, the fact that almost all of these jobs are so menial and provide only a marginal revenue contradicts this maxim. Hence, it is a squander of time and energy. On the other hand, if students attend university full-time, they can devote more time to their studies. For instance, they can attend extra classes to widen their perspective and horizon, or they can conduct additional research and project to enhance their CVs and their chance of getting better jobs.

To recapitulate, the fact that these part-time jobs bring nothing but a distraction for students is an ample reason for one not to consider taking part-time jobs while studying. These jobs do not add value to a person's resume and are only a waste of time since they are always menial jobs with trivial incomes. The time spent on these jobs can be put in better uses to build up resume and improve the chances of better employment. Should you want a convenient life with a prosperous future, never undermine the role of education and a well-prepared resume.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 499, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s with the work environment challenges. Whereas some have an alternative perspective th...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ue contradicts this maxim. Hence, it is a squander of time and energy. On the other hand, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08383233533 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80163736334 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512974051896 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6673295473 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.739130435 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7826086957 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08695652174 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33337973197 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975649947823 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742783402647 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212599092304 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584290304308 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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