Parents should encourage their children to take part-time jobs
In the last three decades, having a part-time job is significant for young people's lives. Some people believe that their children should not work before graduation because they have to focus on studying academic subjects. However, there is a substantial body of evidence calims that parents should encourage their young adults to take a part-time job. Form a personal perspective, the latter opinion carries more weight given that it has a positive impact on young people's skills and confidence. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, provided that youngsters start their practical life early, they could promote their skills. A vivid example that could be given to shed light on that is the pharmacy schools' students in California who sart to work as a pharmacy assistants before graduation could enhance their experience and boots their fundnemtal knowledge. To put it in other words, working in a pharmacy could help them in their study and amplify their ability to discover their career path. Furthermore, they could learn many skills, such as planning , organizing and dealing with patients specially angry ones. In addition to that, they could meet new people and expand their social networks, which improve their communication skills. Consequently, working on young age is significant.
Next, coupled with functional skills, confidence is another virtue of having a part-time jod. Although working at young age could put young people under stress, it could help them to take responsibilities. For instance, Steve Jobs the famous entreprenure and the cheif of Apple company said that when he was young, his parents encouraged him to take responsibility start his practical life early, which helped him to earn money , mange his budget and be financially independent. Moreover, he mentioned that working a part-time job had intergral benifits given that it taught him to pass many tremendous odds and go against his fear, so he could start his own business with confidence. Therefore, taking a part-time job is essential for a future success.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, parents should encourage their teenage children to take part-time jobs, because it could not only enhance their skills, but also promote their experience. It is suggested that students compromise and ensure that their work do not enterfere with their academic performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34025974026 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79700216193 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555844155844 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9928688677 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.222222222 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3888888889 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416504178727 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137148813856 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152543679345 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289889670105 0.150856017488 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127794858101 0.0645574589148 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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