People are busy in work or school. They want to spend time on learning new things. Which one will you choose to learn?
A. learn a sport that you have never played before.
B. learn to cook food that you haven’t prepared before.
C. learn to make something by hand, such as clothing or jewelry.
Nowadays, due to fierce competition in society, people attach greater importance to learning new things to keep the competitive power. Some people claim that learning cooking or hand-works are the preferred option, as cooking at home without consuming in a restaurant or making clothes without shopping in a mall can save money. However, my view is that it is more profitable for people to learn a new sport.
To begin with, playing sports is beneficial to people's physical health. Having a glimpse of the current situation in society, we may marvel at plenty of assignments that people need to finish. With long time sedentary to complete these tasks, they are vulnerable to get obesity or ills. Learning a new sport can help to get rid of diseases. Since during the process of playing, they need to stretch their arms and legs and relax out muscles. Under this circumstance, people are more likely to quipped with a healthier body, which is conducive to their busy working. What's more, doing sports can also help people to lose weight and get a good figure. In contrast, either cooking or making hand-works needs to sit in chair or stands for a long time, it has nothing positive to do with people's health. Consequently, there is every reason to believe that learning a new sports enables people to get a fitness body and perform better in job.
In addition, learning sports is conducive to expand people's social networks and enhance their team spirit. It is widely acknowledged that modern works have become more complex than before that one person cannot solve independently. Via playing sports such as basketball, people can learn how to cooperate with others to achieve the same goal and acquire team spirit. Moreover, playing basketball also stimulate people to be perseverant. With the eager to win, they may insist on sports without having any relax even they feel tired and exhausted. It is no doubt that team spirit and perseverance are both essential elements for working. Furthermore, doing sports can meet with other peers who have the same hobbies and interests. They may become friends and keep in touch with each other in daily life. Hence, they can get rid of loneliness and release pressure due to chatting or traveling with these new friends. By comparison, both making hand-works and cooking are all finished at home alone, they will not get the chance to encounter other people or learn team cooperation. As a result, doing sports not only contributes people to learn team spirit but also help them make new friends.
Judging from the above-mentioned argument, we may naturally arrive at the conclusion that it is worthwhile to learn a new sport other than learning hand-works or cooking due to more chance to acquire physical health and team spirit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cook'.
Suggestion: to cook
... power. Some people claim that learning cooking or hand-works are the preferred option,...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ich is conducive to their busy working. Whats more, doing sports can also help people...
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Line 3, column 867, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'sport'?
Suggestion: sport
...y reason to believe that learning a new sports enables people to get a fitness body an...
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Line 5, column 1062, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...ance to encounter other people or learn team cooperation. As a result, doing sports ...
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Line 5, column 1143, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...ts not only contributes people to learn team spirit but also help them make new frie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, in addition, in contrast, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95717344754 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61596452727 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505353319058 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.136139852 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4583333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4583333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45833333333 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330683875199 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101756036526 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070286305767 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232752437353 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306565289749 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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