Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Nowadays, due to the sense of money-oriented popular in society, parents attach greater importance to children's attitude towards money, thus leading them to learn how to manage their own money in juvenile. Some people claim that parents should not give children allowances; they may waste money buying video games or eating junk food due to their lack of self-control. However, my view is that it is more suitable for children to learn how to manage money when they are young.
To begin with, managing money is conducive for children to learn the meaning of thrift. For one thing, at the beginning of managing money, children may be curious about where is money come from and how can people earn money. If their parents bring them to their workshops and show them that through working hard, then they can make money. Children may know the meaning of work and money deeply. Therefore, they will no longer waste money on expensive and meaningless products. For another thing, children are possibly spend all of their allowances in a short time because of the lacking plan. Then they will have no money to buy some necessaries until the time of the next offered budget. In this case, they will deeply aware of the significance of properly consume. Hence, they will no longer waste money on unnecessary products and make a detailed plan to manage their money. Consequently, there is every reason to believe managing money contributes to children's awareness of frugality.
In addition, managing money helps children building a correct life value. To be more specific, as children gradually grow up, they know they need to deposit money for their future, such as paying tuitions, buying a house, or travelling. With a clear goal in their mind, they may pay great attention to save money and step by step towards the goal. It will be a great sense of fulfilment when they achieve their dream through their efforts. Moreover, when children have enough money to control, they can learn charity by donating money to people needed. Because helping people in need and improving their life quality can make children establish a correct view of life that appropriately using money can make a better world. As a result, letting children control their cash exerts a positive influence on their life sense.
It is true that children may waste their money to buy unnecessary goods due to their immature. However, with the correct leading and teaching from their parents, they will learn how to rational consume and intelligent invest. From what has been discussed above, I draw a conclusion that it is more advisable for children to learn to manage their own money when they are young because they can learn thrift and build a correct life value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...or another thing, children are possibly spend all of their allowances in a short time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, another thing, in addition, such as, as a result, for another thing, for one thing, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92640692641 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46772232884 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465367965368 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5187017535 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9565217391 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0869565217 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26086956522 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259490482004 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102584425596 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051594750247 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202205581793 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224632027975 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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