People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Our education is an important part in our lives. It usually determines our jobs and our position in socity. People attend collage or univeristy for many different reasons. In my view, the majority of them attend univerity to gain more knowledge for two important reasons.

First, more knowledge means potential for better jobs. It goes withour saying that the more educated you are, the more job opportunities are avalible for you. This is a solid fact, especially in nowadays, with all the developed technologies. For example, I remember 7 years age, when I graduated from high school, I was searching for a job. But almost every job with a fair amount of salary requared university level educations. So, I ended up being a worker in resturant. It was a hard and brutforce job with very low salary. So, after a year I decided to continue my studies and go to a university. I went to Tehran University, which is one of the most peritidus universites in Iran. Because I knew how much knowledge was important for getting a job, I studyied hard and graduacted with good grades and lots of honors. After that, I found a decent job within a week, in one of the best companies in Iran. This experice thought me that, knowledge is one of the main factors for having a better job.

Second, humans like to know more. It is in our nature to be curius about the things that we don't know. Actually, this is what makes us different from animals. All the high technology devices and equapment are the result of this unique charactristic of humans. For example, I remember, ever since my younger brother was a child, he was curius about the stars and the sky. He wanted to know were does the world end. His intrest in space and related topics did not stop after he got older. I recall he used to borrow money from me to buy books about space and watched every ducumantery there was about planets. After finishing high school he went to university and studied astronomy as his major. Eventhough the astronomers don't get paied a lot in Iran, my brother choosed to be an astronomer just to follow his curisity and learn more about what had puzzeled him ever since he was a child. I believe my brother is not the only one who attends univerity to know more about the nature of this word and the rules that govern the universe.

In sum, people attend to university for different because not only does it help them to get better jobs, but it is also the most efficient way to learn more.

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Average: 9 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'in fact', 'in my view']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209255533199 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.162977867203 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0945674044266 0.0866891130778 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0402414486922 0.046263068375 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.092555331992 0.0685040099705 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.118712273642 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0221327967807 0.0351676179071 63% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53461626196 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0321931589537 0.0309702414327 104% => OK
Particles: 0.00201207243461 0.00188951952338 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.0865191146881 0.0887237588012 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0209618222197 0% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0140845070423 0.0139019557991 101% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2473.0 2387.08602151 104% => OK
No of words: 446.0 408.028673835 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54484304933 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.295964125561 0.338922669872 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.208520179372 0.251872472559 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.145739910314 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107623318386 0.112833075102 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53461626196 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52466367713 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 60.695223187 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6684587814 135% => OK
Sentence length: 15.9285714286 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8151754424 48.84282405 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3214285714 120.699889404 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9285714286 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.357142857143 0.644075263715 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 36.7805893658 45.7405998639 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.18367346939 1.45489161554 81% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180530888609 0.300154397459 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0929341714655 0.103427244359 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0824198473144 0.0752933317313 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.401024969008 0.497263757937 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164433220296 0.151897553556 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640666342741 0.114077575197 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812984474515 0.0781384742642 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.283266050495 0.336927656856 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0489227117885 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149853837213 0.210909579961 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546147485404 0.0618886996521 88% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.91756272401 305% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 9.0 2.75985663082 326% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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