People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of human’s modern society and galloping rate of science and technology, more and more students prefer university level education for variety of reasons. Higher education plays vital role in our lives for molding our careers. I personally believe that people prefer pursuing higher education basically for achieving excellence in career, building new relations and for upgrading their skills. I hold this opinion for certain reasons which I will explore in subsequent paragraphs.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to think that university education is directly correlated to career enhancement is challenging job descriptions. With the advent of technology, jobs have become more complex and challenging. A person needs to be multi talented to grab brilliant job opportunity with high pay scale and benefits. For instance, for the post of assistant manager, a person with master’s degree in business administration would be better preferred as compared to other person with only bachelor’s degree or high school degree. Thus, higher level education moves a person a step ahead of others.
Second subtle point is that a university level education provides exposure to new environment and new people. Students get to know their professors, class mates and other members in the university campus. In today’s world contacts are very important to succeed in life. Benevolent and enthusiastic behavior of students can help them to build concrete long term relations which will be fruitful to them in future. For example, When I was in university pursuing master’s of commerce, I had build such a strong connections with my teachers and professors that helped me with the reference part needed when I applied to foreign university. So, higher education is pivotal for building connections.
Lastly, Studying in university assist in skill up gradation. No one has zero intelligence, individuals are born with inbuilt creativity and it is the duty of educational institutions to exploit such creativity and hidden talents. Programs such as inter university debate competitions, music concerts, Business fairs etc can help students explore their inbuilt talents and skills. For instance, if a student who is excellent pianist but out of shyness is unable to perform on stage , then such programs will provide him opportunity and motivate him to perform.
In the nutshell, People attend university or college to excel their career path , build strong relations and explore their inner traits which act as bolster to succeed in this contemporary world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39563106796 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92786803974 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563106796117 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9223568888 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.15 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187971634445 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550051318562 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492128187967 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111715013139 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472145010796 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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