People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education is a long and arduous process and in order to succeed in this, learners have to be truly motivated. Personally, I think that people obtain a college degree because they want to establish a career and challenge themselves. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To start with, a successful career guarantees the financial independence which is tremendous in the modern world. These days, if a person wants to have a beautiful house, a reliable vehicle and fiscally support his family, he needs to have a well-paid job. A university degree can provide him with such as employment. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I am a pharmacist and after the graduation from pharmacy school, I have never experienced problems in finding an occupation because my profession is always in demand. Not only that, but I have always been satisfied with my salary and could afford many enjoyable things such as traveling. In fact, I have visited a myriad of countries and much more to come. That is why I believe that education is worth to spend a few years constantly studying.
Secondly, when people obtain a diploma, they feel proud of themselves which makes them happy. Many of us want to be distinguished from others, and so we tend challenge ourselves with difficult tasks such as a tuition in college. For example, most of my peers decided to start working right after the graduation from high school. However, I wanted to be different and because of this, I applied for a pharmacy school. I was practicing pharmaceutical science for many hours a day while my friend had fun. As a result, I was truly happy when I received my license and the feeling of accomplishment was so enjoyable and pleasant for me that I will never forget it. Although there were many other ways to prove myself that I was a strong person, acquiring an education in college seemed the most beneficial.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that many students attend an institution in order to excel in life. This is because a university degree provides individuals with advanced job opportunities, and because it helps them to feel valuable.
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Suggestion: guarantee
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...because it helps them to feel valuable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85254691689 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88737332615 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55764075067 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6614986587 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150639055106 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042939602973 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034170164948 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903306201956 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280141698142 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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