Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern world, it is important to be an educated person in order to excel. For that reason, contemporary parents do all they can to educate their children. Personally, I think that these days parents help their kids to learn in a higher degree than it was in the past. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, the technological development has been helping parents to be aware of their children`s grades. Nowadays, it is possible to check online how a student is doing in school. If parents see that their kid`s scores dropped, they can take an immediate action to help the pupil to catch up in school disciplines. My old brother`s experience demonstrates is well. His daughter is a high student, and as a lot of teenagers, she often gets distracted from her classes on a different king of things, such as her cell phone and social networking websites. Because of that every day my sibling goes to her school portal and check her scores. Therefore, when he sees that she is not succeeding, he talks to her about the importance of advanced education and how it can affect her future. On the other hand, when my brother and I were students, our parents did not have such as the technical opportunity to control us and our grades sometimes suffered.
Secondly, ubiquitous family centers help parents to find talents their children have and evolve them. Modern governments have a myriad of programs, which are aimed to determine what a particular child tends to do better and develop this. For instance, in my country, every small town and the big city have a lot of clubs where parents can bring their children and find them up for an activity they are interested the most. It can be a sports section or a math class. All these activities are free of cost and financed by the government. In this way, my niece, who I mentioned above is in a chemistry class, where teachers out of school help her to learn the subject deep and in details. Her parents believe that the knowledge that she gains in classes, where they brought her since she found out that she liked chemistry, will help her to attend a pharmacy school and become a valuable member of the society and financially independent individual.
To conclude, I strongly believe that today parents are more involved in their kids' education than it was before. This is because these days technology is advanced, and there are a variety of educational centers available for the parent to bring their children in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71753986333 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70421496488 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537585421412 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5770355878 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.619047619 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227489049482 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749361375291 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079236018926 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179801714257 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772372514154 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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