People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
In today's fast-paced world, travelling has become a popular and common activity to relieve stress as it provides a variety of benefits. While some people argue that domestic travel has many advantages, I believe that traveling abroad provides a more valuable experience since you are able to learn about other countries ‘cultures and allows you to discover more about yourself.
First, international traveling allows you to get a better understanding of other countries ‘cultures, traditions and lifestyles. Experiencing cultures different from one´s own can be highly educational and enlightening. Every place has its own unique customs and traveling allows us to discover similarities and differences between cultures, which widens our perspective and understanding of the world. According to some studies and surveys, people feel that traveling abroad made them more tolerant and open to new ideas and lifestyles. In this interconnected world, being tolerant and appreciating diversity have become valuable skills since it promotes acceptance and respect in an environment with people from different backgrounds. Although domestic travelling also provides some valuable experiences, culture and traditions within our own country might not differ as much as further away destinations. Getting to know other countries give a bigger opportunity to be in touch with a much more different environment and ways of thinking.
Furthermore, traveling abroad allows discovering more about ourselves. Having new experiences with different societies can enhance our creativity and help to find more about us. Other cultures have different traditions, perspectives and lifestyles. When you experience different activities, you start realizing what you like and enjoy the most. For instance, traveling abroad as an exchange student provided me, not only the opportunity to learn a new language, but also the chance of discovering new hobbies and taste new food. Going to Hong Kong was an enriching experience as I could try new interesting activities such as hiking, dragon boating and visiting temples. Similarly, I found it both challenging and enriching to learn a new language. If I had never been to Hong Kong, I would have not taken interest into learning Cantonese. By being exposed into a new environment, outside of your comfort zone
In conclusion, I firmly support the idea that traveling abroad brings more benefits, two of which are experiencing new lifestyles and get a better understanding of other people´s cultures, as well as broaden your mind and discover more about your interests and values.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, similarly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59899749373 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15915358606 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538847117794 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9851336327 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.111111111 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226529948017 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741927564717 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582910830132 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153269913139 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717545842881 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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