people do not refer to their families for help that the past
The answer to this question can be varied from person to person. Nowadays's people's lifestyle have changed enormously. In my opinion, individuals can be successful easier without helping their family members than in the past. The are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
TO begin with, with the rapid growth of technology, people are able to make their decision by themselves. As a matter of fact, There are a lot of similar situation on the internet which enables ones to use them in order to become prosperous in their lives in comparison the past. For example, when I was a bachelor student. I had a part-time job in the university campus magazine as a reporter. Then, As I remember, one time. I had an interview with professor Nejati who is a well-know historian in my country. He said me that based on my experiences, nowadays, fewer people refer to their parents for help because each person has a lot of friends, and also there is great deal of sources which assist people in order to achieve their goals than the past. For this reason, I do believe that huge volume of information due to the progression of technology meet people's needs.
The second reason why I agree with it is that thank to available much more job opportunities, people are experiencing independent and self- reliant life. In the past, they had to continue their fathers or ancestors job, by doing so their lives relied on them and they should ask them for help. On the other hand, nowadays, people attend the university easily and expand their horizon and then find a decent job readily. In addition, there is a famous proverb in Persian the equivalent of which in the English may sound like this" the more people have facilities, the less they need to others". This fact clarifies the fact that since they are able to make their lives by themselves and their lives are not dependent on others, today's people do not to need their families members for help. Consequently, facilities make people's lives easier that they do not depend on others.
In conclusion, I completely believe that fewer people refer to their family members for asking help. The rapid growth of technology, Not only provide them a plenty of information making their life easier, but also there are a lot of job apportunities making them self-reliant.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
...a well-know historian in my country. He said me that based on my experiences, nowada...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...g their life easier, but also there are a lot of job apportunities making them self-reliant....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, second, so, then, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83990147783 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71666837748 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.842934823 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.25 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464249095611 0.236089414692 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125759935477 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130239036415 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276746606408 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741142547983 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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