people do their enjoyment more than past. Do you agree or disagree
Due to the fact that people's lifestyle HAS changed these days, it is predictable that they act differently in comparison with their parents' generation. In my opinion, people do their enjoyment more than past. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, today making money is easier in comparison with the past. People can earn money by making videos for instagram or YouTube which was not one of the ways of collecting money for previous generation. Since the ways like this are increasing and without spending lots of time people are generating income, they have more time for doing things that they interest about THEM. For example, my friend is a blogger and she earns her income from this way. She films her lifestyle and what she does during the day, even her trips and adventures which she enjoys a lot. Actually, she does not do anything special; she just does whatever she wants and takes film and collects money.
Furthermore, because of growing technology people have more free time. The technology makes our life easier which means we can do our duties just by pushing a bottom or clicking on a website. As an illustration, today when people want to hold a meeting they can do it by using of applications like Skype or zoom which did not exist in the past. This way of holding meeting can save time for people which they can use it for doing their favorite activities. As another example, by technology people do their shopping at home just by using their mobiles or tablets without spending time in THE traffic.
To put it in a nutshell, first, people work lesser than past for making money and sometimes they earn money by doing what they really like them which means they transform their jobs to their enjoyment. Next, today people have more time because of mechanization which gives them more time for doing things they enjoy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, if, really, so, for example, i feel, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41719260207 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506024096386 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0207777184 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5625 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300752895687 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129002236516 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140842604382 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235169763079 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767962747923 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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