people should try several different jobs until they find what they would like to do for a long term

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people should try several different jobs until they find what they would like to do for a long term

One’s opinion has the power to shift the paradigm of society. When ten percent of the population holds an unshakable belief, people's belief will be adopted by the majority of the community. Evidently, people need only one person to change the group of ten, and the ten will begin to change the entire modus of operation for hundreds to shift. The agreement/The disagreement I choose to make for the topic

To begin with, trying several different jobs can be a good way to make money. When it comes to making money, every penny counts. A thrifty making money habit is indispensable in our lives because little drops of water make the mighty ocean. When people do not get used to working hard, people will be short on cash later. Therefore, trying several different jobs soon will be helpful in the future. For example, when I was a little child, my mom tried several different jobs to make money. When my mom was not used to working hard, she was short on cash. However, A thrifty making money habit became indispensable in her lives eventually. Little drops of water made the mighty ocean. When it comes to making money, every penny counts. Therefore, my mom trying several different jobs became helpful to our family.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...agreement I choose to make for the topic To begin with, trying several different ...
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Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...for the topic To begin with, trying several different jobs can be a good way to make money. W...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... short on cash later. Therefore, trying several different jobs soon will be helpful in the future...
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Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...when I was a little child, my mom tried several different jobs to make money. When my mom was not...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... penny counts. Therefore, my mom trying several different jobs became helpful to our family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, for example, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 1977.66487455 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 213.0 407.700716846 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76995305164 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46363040075 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 212.727598566 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 618.680645161 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1524770522 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.5714285714 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2142857143 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.53405017921 44% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153025986607 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606803388474 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729543147415 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104623153217 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445347554595 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 86.8835125448 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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