Movies and television have negative effects on young people.
One's opinion has the power to shift the paradigm of society. When ten percent of the population holds an unhsakable belief, people's belief will be adopted by the majority of community. Evidently, people need only one people to change the group of ten, and the ten will begin to change the entire modus of operation for hundered to shift. The agreement I choose to make for the topic media have bad effects on young people can also change the paradigm. I will provide two reasons declining creative thoughts and addcition to media to prove the power to change others' opinion with right reasons.
To begin with, media have bad effect because they makes people decline their ability to think actively. Moreover, Lack of active thinking will prevent developement of creative thinking. Thus, because creative thoughts will be hampered by the media, movie and television have bad effects on young people who are in the process of developing their skills to think creatively. For example, when I was yong, I read book Harry Porter. It made me imagine magical world. However, after watching movie Harry Porter I cannot imagine magical world anymore because movie show what magical world and thus I did not need to imagine magical world.
In addition, media have bad effect because typical audience spend lots of time for watching them. Speding much time on media will makes young people addictive to media giving up many valuable things. Addiction to media media make people lose their important things so media have bad effect on young people. For instance, I have experienced addiction to media and it makes me impossible to study even just before the final term test. As a result I got bad grade and feel vary regretful.
Opinions are the medium between the knowledge and the ignorance. In such a case, man must struggle to win a tug-of-war with the power of knowledge to make into reality. I have written logic of declining creative thoughts and addcition to media to make my reasoning for the topic media have bad effects on young people. it is time to blow the final whistle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: One's
Ones opinion has the power to shift the para...
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Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...ith, media have bad effect because they makes people decline their ability to think a...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...g them. Speding much time on media will makes young people addictive to media giving ...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: media
...g up many valuable things. Addiction to media media make people lose their important things...
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Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...media have bad effects on young people. it is time to blow the final whistle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8676056338 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38256245426 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512676056338 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6713897125 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218579924209 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645723683418 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895445848126 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139180536041 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472772337172 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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