People in society work in many different settings, and for a variety of reasons. What do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
• to feel happier about their lives
• to save money for the future
• to develop new skills
Today’s most of the family members have a job, unlike in the past that just the father worked and covered the financial aspect of his family. Although it seems most people work for financial purposes, I believe that there is a more important reason behind this, which is happiness. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in Persian, we have an expression it says ‘’ money brings happiness with itself’’. It means wealthy people have a more comfortable life and their satisfication of living is higher. Because they can have anything they want. Such as traveling where ever they want, having a great house, buying expensive stuff, etc. Not only that but also they experience all of these facilities in the best quality which exists. Consequently, I believe that today’s most people work to reach this level of life, not just earning money to spend their daily needs.
Second, money is a good friend not only in happy days but also in hardship. It is completely obvious that rich people can spend their hard days more comfortable than poor people because most of the time, money can solve any problem. Because, even in hard times, money always brings with itself better equipment, treatment, doctors and hospitals, teachers, etc. I have a compelling example of this; my grandfather is a very wealthy man. Almost ten years ago, my grandmother got horrible cancer. Although she could not resist more than one year, my grandfather provided her the best treatment, doctors, nurses, etc. And after her death, despite the fact that she could not defeat the disease, my grandfather was satisfied inside that he could provide the best things for her. Consequently, he dealt with this event more easily, since he knew that he did anything he could to help her, and he did not have any regret.
To sum up, I firmly believe that behind every person’s job there is a bigger purpose than just earning money. People go to work to have a happier and more comfortable life than usual in their proper and healthy days and their hardships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...heir satisfication of living is higher. Because they can have anything they want. Such ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, i feel, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90277777778 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64620477124 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544444444444 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8850933233 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8947368421 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178996454665 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566340388309 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529181989798 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123378981328 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319647501899 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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