studying
Choosing a major is very sensitive and significant decision in any person’s life. Somehow it affects all of the aspects of life; therefore, it should have done precisely with considering every dimensions of life. So, if I had a friend that she wants to choose between these two kinds of majors I definitely would recommend her to choose the one that requires more years of study but it will provide her better condition of life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, although studying for many years could be hard, she can have a better job with higher salary in future. In other words, she will have more convenient life and that means she can provide a better quality of life, and any things she wants for herself and her family So it is going to be worth to investing some more time and energy on studying process in university. One of my aunt’s experiences demonstrates this concept very well. She told us: thirty years ago, when she was in high school she had tried so hard to accept in medical major in university, finally after so much trying, she got admitted in her favorite major in one of the best universities in Iran. After that she almost studied for more than twenty years to get her post PHD, and now she is one of the best doctors in Mashhad. Besides, not only she is one of the best expert and famous in her field, but also she earns lots of money and she has the best quality of life that anyone can imagine that.
Second, we can see all over the world that people with higher grades in their job always have a better work condition. It simply reveals with comparing between a worker’s job condition and her/his boss’s. Although, always it is not this harsh difference condition between various jobs’ positions, it is something that affects in long terms work, so we should consider it in mind.
To sum up, I really believe that it worth it to invest some more times in studying, because it will guarantee not only a better quality of life but also a better job condition for whole life. In addition, it is obvious that job in higher positions always have a better conditions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... person's life. Somehow it affects all of the aspects of life; therefore, it should h...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...an have a better job with higher salary in future. In other words, she will have more con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, i feel, in addition, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57397959184 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48837232428 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502551020408 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4133165944 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.533333333 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1333333333 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.092332646971 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371992756207 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062851816025 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.046084190585 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475448723309 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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