People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do- rather than doing things they should do.
Controversy exists over whether people's excited about personal and obligatory activities. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that people should spend most of their time on doing thing they like. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is necessary for people to do things they should do. As far as I am concerned, people today must spend a high amount of their time on personal enjoyment because not only development of the technology made the life easier but also, there are many amusing facilities that people can use. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first points worth mentioning is that advancement of the technology cuased the life to be easier. Nowadays, developing of technolgy happeing at a very fast pace. People can travel to any part of the world without wasting a lot time by the use of airplanes. Airplanes assist people to reach destination very fast which was not plausible in the past. Travelling in the past time require a lot of time and people could get tired by the desitnation distance. For instance, students who loved to travel, can buy a ticket and travel to any part of the country and comeback after two days. Therefore, people enjoying to travel, prefer to engage in this activity.
A further more subtle point is that facilities present a lot of options to people. They are dealing with work or personal challenges all the time and they are searching for a way to forget about their hectic life. Furthermore, in the weekend people will spend their time with friends by the use of facilities such as gyms or bars. For example, my friend working at a big company has multiple task to perform during the week. At the weekend, he prefers going to bars with his friends and talk about his problems and have a good time. Moreover, other facilities such as museums are new in part of the world and many people enjoy spend their time on visiting it. It present impressive information about the past and distinct animals which is very fun and interesting. For instance, when a meusems opend at our city, its ticket was sold in a 5 minute which show people enjoy spending their time on activities that are fascination.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguements, people today spend much time on personal enjoyment due to advancing the technology and existence great facilities in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...lausible in the past. Travelling in the past time require a lot of time and people could ...
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Line 3, column 663, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'presents'?
Suggestion: presents
...joy spend their time on visiting it. It present impressive information about the past a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61041161552 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9358770731 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8571428571 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305633592398 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843052027052 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116872440807 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191345955662 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144355156001 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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