People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The question of how our leisure time should be spent has been debated for many years. Many people
feel that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, but I hold the opposite opinion. I feel
this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people spend more time working than ever before, which means that broadly speaking,
individuals are spending a lot of time doing things that they should be doing. Studies indicate that we
spend more time at our offices than ever before, and that smart phones and internet access means that
people continue to work even when they are not being paid. My own experience is a compelling example
of what I mean. I work for a large investment banking firm where my scheduled workday is from nine
o’clock to five o’clock, but I actually average about eight hours of overtime every week. I do not do this
because I enjoy it, but because I feel a sense of obligation to provide a service to my company and earn
money for my family. Everyone at my firm does the same thing. We often compare ourselves to our
parents, who almost never worked overtime nor took weekend calls and e-mails from their bosses. It
seems like the present generation emphasizes professional obligations over personal enjoyment.
Secondly, it seems to me that many popular leisure activities include a self-improvement aspect, which
means that even our hobbies fall into the realm of what we should be doing. One of the most popular
pasttimes these days seems to be long distance running, an activity which is also incredibly beneficial for
our health. Another perfect example is the way I spend most of my free time working out at a local gym.
Although this is certainly enjoyable for me, part of why I do it is that it keeps me strong, healthy and fit.
This makes me both a better family man and a better employee. I consider all of these to be things that I
should be deeply concerned about.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people today do not spend an inordinate amount of time doing
things that they like to do. This is because people work longer hours than ever before, and because even
our personal hobbies tend to involve an aspect of obligation.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, second, secondly, so, broadly speaking, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7398989899 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50878850103 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532828282828 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7547939597 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7894736842 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.53405017921 507% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307921807638 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950038228354 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128243525217 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855807098401 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982389814953 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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