Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5-10 behave better ( for example by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward others). Which one action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why?
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that people's behavior has changed over time. In this regard, children's traits have also evolved and differ from the past. There has been no shortage of debates among parents on whether it is more beneficial to limit the types of programs that children watch or supervise them more clearly to know about their activities while playing with friends. Meanwhile, the is a tendency toward the notion that spending more time with children will yield much more essential outcome. As for this writer's opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In what follows, I will delve into the paramount reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance on this subject is that parents by dedicating more time to their children will be able to build a stronger relationship with them. It is crystal clear that those individuals who spend lots of time talking are aware of each other's problems and ideas. Thus, these friends will be able to play a role in solving each other's problems. As a result, their friendship will grow stronger, and they will respect each other. It is worth mentioning that if parents do such activity, they earn their children's trust and respect. By way of illustration, I was a troubled boy in second grade. I remember that I had lots of fights with everyone in our school, and also I shouted at my parents. Only when my father started to talk to me about my behavior and my daily life, did I realize that my act was not suitable. After that day, not only did I respect my family, but I also recognized that I could rely on them while having harsh times. This example manifests how parents can capture their child's heart and make them deferential toward anyone only by talking and spending time with them.
Furthermore, the other mentioned avenues are not practical and plausible. It is axiomatic that if children know that others are observing them, they will bear a defiant attitude in order to prove their free will in their lives. Thus, monitoring them will undoubtedly exacerbate the situation. In addition, parents cannot entirely limit the type of TV shows that children watch. Children owing to the state of their age will get more curious about some materials or information that they do not have access. My personal experience drives this concept home, when I was seven years old, I loved watching action movies. However, my mother did not allow me to watch those movies on the grounds that those films incorporated blood and death. Despite my mother's strenuous efforts, I managed to sneak behind her back and borrow some videos from my friends. Hence, her approach was not useful. Had she only spent some time describing the reason for her acts, I would not have spied on those movies. This example reveals my point.
By perusing the paragraphs above, one can infer that the best way to enhance children's behavior is by talking to them. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating, first: It will lead children to be respectful; Second, monitoring them and limiting their access to TV programs will worsen the situation. As for this writer's advice, I vehemently urge parents to spend more time with their children and do not underestimate the role of talking in forming their personality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, thus, while, as for, in addition, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 93.0 43.0788530466 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2755.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85035211268 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55011209306 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508802816901 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8309045191 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198911613068 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569660402651 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499855505681 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147087430962 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241263662357 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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