people today spend too much time on personel enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather then doing thins they should do. Do you agree or disagree with following statements.

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people today spend too much time on personel enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather then doing thins they should do. Do you agree or disagree with following statements.

People today underpresure of capatilism which is force us to work more, gives us less money. Due to the fact that I can't agree with this statetments, and my several reason for this, having no time for personal enjoment, working harder than past and making low income to spent.

First reason that I disagree with statment is having no time for personel enjoments. In these days technology rapily grow, and most of the companys do not need human muscle anymore. These people, who had to leave to job because of this stituation, have to work more than it use to. They have to improve their ability to find a job or making more money. Even if they find a job, working time is not getting shorter, ındeed people are no time to spend time for personely. For intance, Iam working Isbank , which is the biggest bank in Turkey, they always force me to someting more, now if want to get upgrade to my position ı have to get 85 point from the toefl, so ın my free time ı always study about toefl test.
Secondly working harder than the past is crucial attraction. Usually company replace their work force to tecnology, so you have to work harder than before because you can eaisly lost your job. Human rights are dying everyday, even if you work harder you having less money, companys don't want to give your extra hours payment, basically you working more to keep your job,to examplify; one of my friends working in audit company, she is working almost 13 hours or 14 hours in a day, beside working she sleeps rather than has a fun outside. Her company always say her there to many people waiting for this job, if you want to leave there is a door, do to the fact that she is working harder and harder to keep her job.
In addition to after two reason, my final reason is having low income or we can say inflation. Globalizm effect in our life things are easy to get, but this make us inflation, when the consume increase also price effect and they are increase, but mostly our salary stay stabil. So we have no extra money to spent for our personel enjoment, usually ıf we save extra money we use this money for our personel improvement. For Example, i could not go to holiday in this summer, after ı save the money and i am spending for Toefl education and for toefl test, i could not spent that money for my personel enjoyment.

In conclusion, after all this reason ı can not agree with this statement , ın my personel liffe and my observetion show me the opposide side of this statement. Some people may agree, but vast majorty believe what ı believe.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nderpresure of capatilizm which is force us to work more, gives us less money. Du...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s us less money. Due to the fact that I cant agree with this statetments, and my sev...
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Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...ant agree with this statetments, and my several reason for this, having no time for personal e...
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Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'harder than'?
Suggestion: harder than
... no time for personal enjoment, working harder then past and making low income to spent. ...
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... no time for personel enjoment. In these days technology rapily grow, and most of...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
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...e of this stituation, have to work more then it use to. They have improve their abil...
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...s stituation, have to work more then it use to. They have improve their ability to ...
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Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'improved'.
Suggestion: improved
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Suggestion: ,
...rsonely. For intance, Iam working Isbank , which is the biggest bank in Turkey, th...
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Line 3, column 629, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'got', 'gotten'.
Suggestion: got; gotten
...nt to get upgrade to my position ı have get 85 point from the toefl, so ın my free ...
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Line 4, column 19, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'harder than'?
Suggestion: harder than
...y about toefl test. Secondly working harder then the past is crucial attraction. Usually...
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Message: Did you mean 'harder than'?
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...force to tecnology, so you have to work harder then before because you can eaisly lost your...
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...o tecnology, so you have to work harder then before because you can eaisly lost your...
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...ly lost your job. Human right are dying everyday, even ıf you work harder you having les...
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Suggestion: tell
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Message: Use 'due to' or 'because of' to fix spelling and readability of this sentence.
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Suggestion: ,
...ason ı can not agree with this statement , ın my personel liffe and my observetion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, after all, for example, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53246753247 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24564828872 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487012987013 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.3255437147 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.333333333 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.5376344086 451% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126674212993 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438854522444 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338220984689 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674410454023 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230658564635 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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