On no account would anybody neglect the significance of money on the lives of people and its role in achieving most of the dreams. However, besides the money that individuals earn, other benefits are available in having a job. Of those sundries of advantages to be mentioned, in my opinion enjoying life and finding new friends are the reasons that should be dwelled upon here.
Firstly, of course, everybody wants to be useful to his society and does not like a sedentary lifestyle. Having a role at an organization paves the way for a person to feel he is a significant part of that organization and subsequently, an essential human for his country. My friend's experience is the best example to illustrate this concept. However, Jim is a civil engineer with remarkable expertise in his major. Having a rich father, he lacks the need for money, but he works as an employee of a company with a low income. All of his friends denounce him to quit his job and enjoy spending money. Nevertheless, Jim says he does not relax with money, on the contrary, he delights to be a participant in an office with the colleagues to compete for achieving on special goal.
Secondly, friends are an inseparable part of human beings' lives and play a crucial role in feeling satisfied. It goes without saying that workplaces are one of the places that people meet each other and start strong relationships. For instance, I work as a teacher in a high school and many young students are in my surrounding. Not only other teachers but also many of the students are my friends. We go to the mountain every weekend and breathe fresh air at nature. Hardly do I feel depressed with these kind buddies. Our school has an energetic atmosphere and all of us enjoy working there. This job makes me happy, not to mention its noticeable salary.
To put in the nutshell, I have personally subscribed to the view that having an occupation is an essential for a better life in the light of increasing the sense of being positive and finding new friends. It is high time we left the belief that money is the only reason for doing an action.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, of course, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.632 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72624642238 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2414839694 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.85 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127913686015 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398499060086 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358020085145 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792792139806 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368326124634 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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