There are numerous reasons why people work. Earning money is indispensable to meet basic needs. Barring these needs, people have several needs in terms of entertainment or hobbies for which money is required. As far as I am concerned, money is an important factor to fulfill our dreams and also to provide a healthy life.
First of all, there are hundreds of thousands of people out there encountering with diverse problems without finding out considerable solutions. In this regard, extracurricular activities like going to the gym, community center, sports activity, photography or expeditions help them to find respite from their daily hectic schedule. Indulging yourself in such activities keep you away from emotional turmoil, pending works, unresolved problem and health issues. Hence, people often invest their money in such activities. My experience is a compelling example of this. My job is very stressful and tedious. To alleviate my stress, I often go on vacation with my friends which helps to restore all serenity and vitality of my life. If I had no money, I could not afford such trips.
Secondly, nowadays the cost of health checkups, surgery, and medical tests has been increasing at a skyrocketing rate. To get a good insurance plan, you must need a decent amount of money. Everybody wants their family to be safe and healthy and also want to provide the best medical treatment to cure their ailments. I would like to shed some light on this aspect with a vivid example. Recently, my uncle was diagnosed with a heart block which required a surgery. This surgery costed an arm and a leg. As my cousin worked in a multinational company, he afforded the cost of surgery easily. So to provide medical treatment and to take care of your family, money is significant.
In conclusion, in this world full of worries and unresolved problem, it is really important to spend some time engaging yourself into entertainment or other hobbies. And at the same time money gives us access to expensive health treatment which of utmost importance.
- 51)What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 76
- do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 80
- People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? 76
- People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? 70
- In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes littl 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...ts activity, photography or expeditions help them to find respite from their daily hectic schedul...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... money, I could not afford such trips. Secondly, nowadays the cost of health ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03519061584 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81491628041 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624633431085 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9545208313 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0454545455 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186529016475 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559351629263 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839897892675 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116719943793 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801659140218 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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