A person should never make an important decision alone.
It is undeniable that making a decision is very hard, but at the same time, it is a fundemental step for achieving any progress in the life. In my view, a person should never make an important decision alone. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, getting assistance from others in making an important decision will save us money because most of the time, a bad choice means that we are going to lose money without any benifit. For instance, last year, when I was trying to buy a new car, I was thinking that I know how to do it, and I do not need any help from any one. I went to a car dealer who was well dressed, so I thought that he is a profesional seller. I bought a red small car that resempled my dream car. Unfortunately, this car was the worste car ever. It was full of issues, and I spent my last year at the mechanic store until I finally sold it at a very low price. On the other hand, last month, my younger sister sara bought a new car. She was smarter than me, she took my uncle with her to the store, so he helped her in choosing the best car for her budjet.
Second, people have different experiences in the life. In response, if a person is trying to choose something based on his experience only, it means that he will not have the whole picture of this circumstance, which means that he could make a wrong choice. For example, when my first son turned six years old, I was looking for a good school for him, but because he was my first kid, I did not have any clue on which school I have to pick. However, my older brother has three sons older than mine, so I asked him for a help. he gave me a list of surounding schools with their advantages and disadvantages. This list was very useful for me to determine what school is better for my son needs.
To sum up, I believe that no one has to make an important decision alone, not only because they can save money by using other's help, but also they can benifit from expert people on making the best decision. Moreover, I suggest that a person has to choose carefully who is going to assist him in any thing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...decision will save us money because most of the time, a bad choice means that we ...
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...because most of the time, a bad choice means that we are going to lose money without...
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... do it, and I do not need any help from any one. I went to a car dealer who was well dr...
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...ever. It was full of issues, and I spent my last year at the mechanic store until...
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...my first kid, I did not have any clue on which school I have to pick. However, my...
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...r than mine, so I asked him for a help. he gave me a list of surounding schools wi...
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...carefully who is going to assist him in any thing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.16262135922 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3275306963 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51213592233 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5116755105 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2631578947 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6842105263 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21052631579 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168124576503 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646277156536 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149024678008 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15861638542 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132927694705 0.0645574589148 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.85 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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