In modern time, computer gamers are growing up very fast. Many children around the worlds keep playing games for hours or days. It takes a lot of time. So, I do agree that playing computer games is a waste of time.
First of all, psychologically it is proven that the primary ages are very important for the adulthood. It is the time that the future life is based on it. There are many examples that if a child has left schools, then they had not gotten the chance of studying in their adulthood. On the other hand, there are many well know examples of children who have studied at their childhood and become very successful at their adulthood. I can compare myself with my cousin. My parents did not allow me to stay on computer for longer time, so I had to practice my lessons and do my school assignments. Whereas my cousin was busy for longer time playing games, and his parents were not taking care of it at all. Then finally when we graduated from school and participated the general exam to enter university, he failed there and I could successful pass the exam. After this time, he did not get the chance to study and come to university while I have even graduated from university.
Second, children need to follow their school and do their assignments on time. If they take their time on computer games, so they do not get the chance to focus on their lesson at schools. Computer games may turn to their daily discussions. So, they will lose their interest for school and finally they miss their important ages of childhood. I am of the conviction that parents have to control their children's behaviors.
Finally, continuously looking at the screen might be harmful for the eye vision. Every step of games may take a long time, so it negatively affects the children's eyes. I can recall my nephew. He was a real fun of GTA (A computer game). He was staying on the computer for days. Unfortunately, it resulted in his eye problems. These days, he is under medical treatment. So, it is not safe and parents should prohibit their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun well seems to be countable; consider using: 'many wells'.
Suggestion: many wells
...adulthood. On the other hand, there are many well know examples of children who have stud...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, second, so, then, well, whereas, while, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5597826087 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51803513581 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5252607733 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.5384615385 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1538461538 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258317738734 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769255709225 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898691123985 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194880647133 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129317154941 0.0645574589148 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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