Playing computer games is waste of time. children should not be allowed to played them.
Today’s technology provides our generation many possibilities including both entertainment and learning or working. However, despite the fact that people mostly derive benefits from technology, the question “should or not children use computer for playing games” remains open. personally speaking, I firmly believe that computer games worse children.
Firstly, the time children spend in front of their computer could be spent more effectively. For instance, it is not allowed to my elder sister playing computer games. Since she has a spare time, she can take advantage of this. Thus, my sister knows two foreign languages as well as her native language, she has good marks at school and, moreover, she swims every week. On the other hand, her classmate Dany is just sitting at home and playing computer games every day. He has not any hobbies and his school notes are on the rocks.
Secondly, computer has a negative effect on a child’s health. Not only eyes suffer from it, but all body. As far as I know, a person who looks at computer’s screen more than two hours a day becomes more nervous, tired and disturbing. Furthermore, it can lead to permanent headaches or even to depression. While the children have a growing body, they are more susceptible to computer’s adverse impact.
As I have illustrated, computer games disrupt children and should not be allowed or, at least, the time for game should be reduced. Otherwise, a child may face not only health but also social problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Personally
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, at least, for instance, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 52.1666666667 33% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 248.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18548387097 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8854744045 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.665322580645 0.524837075471 127% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7122096675 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.375 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353303297837 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102049259034 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116848628291 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21373210121 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917315299172 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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