Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to
play them.
I do not agree with the statement that children should not be allowed to play computer games as it is waste of time. I believe that computer games can have huge impact on children. Computer games is not just a source of entertainment but also can be used as a platform for overall development of children in many aspects.
First, there are many computer games which allow children to learn while playing the games. Learning with the help of computer games is more interactive and is far more productive than learning from books. For example, there are many mobile and computer games available today which help children learn mathematics like basic arithmetic and many other things. As children learn with the help of these games, they take more interest in it and eventually learn better. There are some games such as puzzles, chess which help in brain development of children.
Second, in todays fast paced world where even small children are busy with their day to day activities like schools, tuitions, sports and many different activities, computer games can act as a way of relaxation for children. I believe that children should be given some time in a day to play good computer games which helps in relaxing the mind and also entertain the children. For example, there are many car racing games available which children play and help them feel entertained and relaxes their brain and gets them ready for the next day. As these types of games are very popular among children it helps in connection among different children as children discuss about these games.
To sum up, I feel that computer games should be part of children daily life but children should play games for a limited time as playing games for a long time can affect their eyesight and also detaches them from actual physical games which are also necessary for health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun mobile seems to be countable; consider using: 'many mobiles'.
Suggestion: many mobiles
...ning from books. For example, there are many mobile and computer games available today whic...
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Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ore interest in it and eventually learn better. There are some games such as puzzles, ...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ties like schools, tuitions, sports and many different activities, computer games can act as a...
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Line 7, column 49, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'parted'?
Suggestion: parted
...p, I feel that computer games should be part of children daily life but children sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i feel, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86075949367 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3875696228 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449367088608 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5830890429 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.153846154 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3076923077 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468471783326 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216586990994 0.076458572812 283% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154864084422 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.351331219168 0.150856017488 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111784974048 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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