Professional athletes such as the football player and basketball player deserved high salaries to be paid?
I agree with the point that professional athletes deserved high pay for the following reasons.
On one hand, as professional athletes create great value, they should receive equivalent reward. That is to say, the more their work worth, the more they should get paid. Athletes, especially those well-known, bring incalculable/tremendous benefits for the economy. For example , the average price for watching a NBA game is 2000 yuan, if not higher. Besides, TV stations and websites also have to spend a large amount of money for broadcasting the game. Furthermore, commercial advertisement companies compete fiercely for just one minute showtime during the game by lavishing/squandering money. According to a research conducted by American National Economy Bureau (ANEB) in 2015 , the profit generated by NBA that year is more than 1000 billion dollars, and that yielded by the most famous basketball player, namely, Kobe Bryant, is more than 10 billion. So, is it fair for Kobe to receive, say, just 100,000 dollars a year now that he earns so much financial gain for the organization? Without professional players like Kobe, the game would not have made so much profits and it would not have been so influential. Thus, high salaries paid to the expert athletes is what they deserve.
On the other hand, the high risks professional sportsmen take during the training and competition justify why they deserved paid well. Generally speaking, the pay one receives from the job is proportionate to the risk they face. Those who play in such sports as football or basketball are usually faced with considerable risks, either from competitors or the sports itself . Messi, one of the famous football players in the world, was badly injured because of a slide tackle during a game in 2014. The injury and the recover process followed prevented him from attending the rest games that year, making him lose almost all the benefits he could have received. Sang Lan, a well known gymnast, hurt herself during the Olympic in 1998, leading to paralysis for the rest of her life. She could not devote herself to any job anymore, not to mention making money. The list could go on and on. Obviously, it is because of their past salaries that they and their family could get through the miserable time and lead a decent life. If they had not been paid well in the past, there would not have been a chance for them to put themselves together.
According to the reasons listed above, I hold that professional athletes are deserved to receive high salaries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, if, so, thus, well, for example, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81807084551 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561320754717 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2669256997 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3636363636 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229221457979 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061362286926 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726806122505 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166998992311 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277070775392 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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