Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The idea of extended family members that is grandparents, cousins, aunts, uncles living together nowadays is much more sparse and uncommon as compared to past days. It would not be wrong to consider it a failing practice with advancing age. Few reasons could be discussed as follows.
Firstly, with the advent of this era of hustle and bustle, people are more busier in their lifestyles then they ever were before. With the increasing expenses, competition, the pressure to maintain social image has approached a very drastically damaging extent. Family members do not have time to see and greet each other. Parents are distant from their own children. The centres like child care centres, old age homes, have taken the joy of togetherness away from the family members. The people are becoming a victim of mental and health diseases like depression, silicosis, Parkinson's disease more than ever before. The idea of grandmothers reading bed time stories to grandchildren is becoming a fantasy in its own now. The children long for the affection of their grandparents, they yearn for the joy of laughter with cousins. This whole new way of life is benefitting no one other than office bosses,
Consequently, the element of happiness, bliss, cheerfulness is becoming a fading feeling. The new robotic and monotonous lifestyle has left a human spirit dull and empty. The presence of gadgets and innovations like tabloids, computers, video games has become an addiction for children. The children are not getting the warmth and interaction with other family members making them more anti-social and unhealthy. They have poor mental and physical capabilities. Their growth, bone strength, muscle power, eyesight, everything is being adversely effected. But if the same kids could get some taste of bondage with their extended family members their whole personalities could take a beautiful shift towards optimism and better health. They could get more attention, become more confident and excel in their tasks on daily basis.
Sadly, these plus points of a bonded extended family are not considered nowadays. Their significance and importance is highly neglected and ignored. Lonely lifestyles and privacy are the standard of society. People with more money are respected while parents and siblings are condescended. In a summation, i would strongly agree with the presented statement that extended family is given less attention and value in this era than in past times. The quotation of Old is Gold is totally forgotten.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'busier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: busier
...is era of hustle and bustle, people are more busier in their lifestyles then they ever were...
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Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rkinsons disease more than ever before. The idea of grandmothers reading bed time s...
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Line 3, column 724, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n is becoming a fantasy in its own now. The children long for the affection of thei...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s has become an addiction for children. The children are not getting the warmth and...
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Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...lings are condescended. In a summation, i would strongly agree with the presented...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28855721393 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75992978991 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587064676617 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.831364526 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.04 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.08 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17519291497 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422721686689 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549295156157 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122883164468 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580373372498 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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