Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern era, people were inclined to have busy lifestyles and routines. Parents spends less attention to their children due to hectic schedule in their work. It is a very controversial question whether the best time children should spend their time is to play games or sports rather than doing schoolwork. In my humble opinion, I think that it is beneficial that youngsters get involved in sports activities. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children spends majority of their time at school and it is better that they have other extra curricular activities to be more rounded individual. Moreover, getting involved in sports have positive outcome for a child. They will have active lifestyle which will help them be physically and mentally fit. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, after my class in school my mother drop me off with my volleyball training in our hometown. I spend additional two hours stretching and running the court to warm up before playing the game. I loved participating in sports because I feel more energized and relaxed after playing. In addition, I become more physically fit I noticed I lose 2 pounds just after playing volleyball for 1 month and my coach teaches us how to eat healthier food. I also teach my family to eat healthy foods and we are now eating a healthier and nutritious meal at home. This illustrates that being involved in sports have positive effects on the well being of a person.
Secondly, another positive outcome of playing sports is you will gain more friends. Sports teaches people to mingle and communicate with other person. As a result, you will get to know that person and become friends eventually. For instance, in my volleyball team I used to practice a lot with Princess and we really got to know each other very well. After our practice, we hang out in my house and bond with each other. We continued this bond with each other and became best friends. I think without being involved in sports I will still be shy and hesitant to talk to other people. Hence, sports taught me to become friendly and at ease with other person.
To summarize, I believe that it is beneficial that children should spend their time in playing sports. This is because they are physically fit and gain new friends.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76960784314 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57935847792 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502450980392 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.322796403 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.0833333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273335021301 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779643674519 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804824486256 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184010149816 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569550199562 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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