The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
In modern society, there exist a variety of rules for young people to follow or comply with. However, in my point of view, I believe those rules are kind of meaningless and too strict for them. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, young people are expected to find a high-paying job. Every parent wants their kids to become a doctor or engineer because those occupations are high-status in the modern world and they usually have a good salary. However, young people might not interest in those kinds of careers but their parents will still give high expectations which makes them feel stress and helpless. One of my friends is a compelling example of this idea, he was really good at dancing since he was young. He felt free and relax when he follows the music with his dance move and he even joined a popular dance crew in the town. They had won lots of competitions and my friend was well known by lots of dancers due to his excellent performance during the dance battle. However, his mother wanted him to become a programming engineer like his father so she banned him from dancing after he attended high school. My friend was so frustrated since then, he cannot even focus on his studies in school and skipped classes. As a result, now he is twenty-five years old but he is still unemployed and playing computer games every day. If his mother supported his dancing, he might already become a professional dancer instead of staying home all day.
In addition, societies expect young people to respect the olds. Young people have been educated to respect old people in public such as giving up the seats for them on buses or trains. Nevertheless, some old people will take it for granted and being mad when the teenagers do not do it. For instance, two years ago, when I was on a bus, my stomach hurt so much that I can barely stand by my feet, so I decided to sit down in order to alleviate my pain. However, an old man came to me and forced me to gave him the seat. I told him I had a stomachache but he did not believe and blame me in front of every people. Eventually, I walked away and stand by the window. I felt so sad and mad about what I had experienced and it is all because of society's expectation toward young people.
In conclusion, I strongly believe the rules for young people are useless and strict. This is because societies often expect young people to find a high-paying job and respecting old people.
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- TPO53 Integrated Writing Task 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47136563877 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44882810882 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522026431718 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0674003553 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2608695652 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82608695652 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236233472461 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083421390341 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0997613108345 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200468091634 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979225008676 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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