rules in today societies are too strict for young people
Even living in small groups need some fundamental rules which all members should follow to assure the success of that group. Expanding this point to bigger societies has led to creation of different legislation which some of them are not easy for young people to follow. Although some people believe each society need these hard rules to maintain in the best shape, others think they are too hard. I agree with the second group. in my view, in today's societies most of the rules people expect youngsters follow are too restrict. I will elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, new scientific discoveries on different fields have led to creation of lots of rules which some of them are hard to follow. Each day people hear about new researches on different topics, especially health, and one of the biggest results of them is appearance of new rules, which most of them are not easy to follow. These discoveries have created different legislation regarding social life, health and some other related topics which prohibit people, especially younger of consumption of some products. As an example, I can mention Japan. This country is know for its hard rules, and all people must follow them, in other wise they will get punished for committing crimes. Some of the researches in the field of health announced that chewing gums, which is popular among the young population, can damage tooth so bad and people should be prohibited of using them. As the result, they legislated some strict rules for this action, and if a police man see a person chewing gum in the public, can punish him and even send him to the jail. In my view, this rule is one of different endeavor rules in this country, which is based on some scientific discoveries that is not accepted by other countries.
Second, nowadays, people pay more attention to the social behaviors, and as elder expect a lot of youngsters, they have made some strict rules. Some decades ago, elders just expected respectful behavior of the younger, an it was not hard to do, But now, they expect much more which has made some rules. As societies grow more and more, they pay more attention to the quality of human's connection. This attention has led to establishment of strict rules.For instance, in my country, Iran, all young people should respect to older a lot. If they use bad words in front of them, Elders can ask court to punish them, and I believe this rule is too strict.
To sum up, all societies need some rules to guarantee the their success, and we cannot cast any doubt on their importance. Some countries have gone much far away and have set some rules which force young population to follow them, and some times they can make life hard for them. These rules which are the consequence of some scientific discoveries or changes in the social status are really hard for youngsters. In my view, in today societies most of the rules are hard for young people to follow compared to the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, for instance, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75384615385 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44053236505 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446153846154 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0640267158 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.47826087 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6086956522 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5652173913 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315449969613 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108933255231 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107721382323 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231758213679 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682459550161 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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