A school has been given money to spend on one thing to improve the school. Do you think it is better to spend the money on organizing social activities for students to participate in after school hours, or on improving the quality of the food served in the cafeteria?
Budget allocation is an essential duty of educational institutions, and if done correctly, would aid their programs to be much more fruitful. I think that schools, especially universities, are not taking social skills of students very seriously, and this area needs immediate considerations. So it is only logical for me to advocate allocating budget to organizing social events and activities.
The reason I am stating that "immediate consideration" is needed is that nowadays, we are facing many serious social problems. My main slogan for this argument is that in the contemporary world, we need more kindness rather than more scientists. And since kindness has to do with the world of emotions which falls within the realm of social activites, we should promote social activities among students who are at the height of their vulnerablity and flexibility. In social activities, students learn sympathy; the lack of which is the most common problem of today's people which leads to selfishness and a society with deteriorating human values. The other skill students will learn is the art of how to communicate effectively. Communicative skills are very important to lead a healthy life. Anger, anxiety, commitment issues, and relationship challenges are clear instances of poor communicative skills. Contemplating these vital issues, I cannot begin to think how one might think that the quality of the food can be superior to social concerns.
Students in high schools are mostly aged from forteen to eighteen years old, a period in which they need the most entertainment and leisure time. I think that the absence of a healthy pastime can encourage young, pleasure-seeking students to engage in leisures which will cause them many regrets to fill the void. For example, in my country, the lack of free and enjoyable recreational activities have created a niche for opportunitists to invite simple-minded teenagers and students to using narcotics. If schools were to be organizing more social gatherings, we will witness less of these heartbreaking incidents.
But enough with moralizing lectures. Students in any age having mundane enjoyments certainly cannot be frowned upon! I think that social activies are great respites from dealing with professor and meeting stressful deadline, especially for university students. There is no doubt that studying, especially in well-renowned university, is very stressful and challenging. And not everyone can cope with these hardships effectively. I think that some group activities and social events can take the students' minds off their stress-inducing routines, and give them a chance to rejuvenate. One cannot possible expect students-sociable creatures in nature- to work without any rest. Even a car needs some rest after a few hours of working for crying out loud.
So we should not fall victim to the misconception that social activities are not that important, and nugatory issues like food can be of higher priorities to receive budgets. Organizing social activities will benefit society in the ways mentioned in this essay grealy in the long run. No amount of effort and money put into social activities can be considered too much.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, as to, for example, i think, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2710.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38767395626 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16357100871 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554671968191 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6676158414 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.12 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.24 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201945726413 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050294903262 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380738149848 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109152984837 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244593955276 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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