Some charitable organizations allow people who give money to charity to choose how their donations will be used. If you were to give money to charity, would you prefer to choose how your donation is going to be used, or do you think it is more effective to leave that decision to the organization? Why?
Some charity fund raiser prefers to decide their charity to specific thing, while the others let the donator decide themselves where to give the fund. Although it might seem sensible for us to select or donation goes to, it would be wise for the charity originator to decide where to donate the money.
Selecting where our charity money goes might give us a relief because we know exactly the place the money would land. By doing that will make us no worries about the money being corrupted by the initiator. The money will also be secure because we transfer them directly to its destination’s account. While some argue this might be the most effective way to donate money, I believe this might cause extra work for the charity agency.
I personally prefer to let the charity organization let them decide the fund goes to. I would make them easier to select whether it would be donated to the elder or the orphan. It would be less stressful and less physically tired because they have already spent most of their time arranging the social event. Beginning from the conception of the event, the donation format, and also communicate with the elderly or orphan, they do it by themselves and not being paid for that. It will lessen the burden of the foundation to let them decide on their own.
To sum up, I would choose to let the host of charity event to decide where the charity fund will go to.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1153.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 250.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.612 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31594473164 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 212.727598566 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9773618537 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.0833333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308673288823 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123726363298 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442349391187 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202620681206 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373553588335 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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