Do you agree or disagree with the following statement These days children spend more time doing homework or participating in organized activities related to school or sports However they should be given more time to do whatever they want

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? These days, children spend more time doing homework or participating in organized activities related to school or sports. However, they should be given more time to do whatever they want.

In today's recent world, with the advance educational phases children have to face, they are going to spend more time on school activities rather than doing what kids really willing to do. Personally, I agree with these statement as the demand for future generation skills and abilities are more complicated than the generation X and parents inevitably force their juvenile to be better than they used to when they were kids. This essay will explain how this complicated ideas might developed.
I believe with the fast changing development of science and technology during the late '90's till present has driven the future generation must keep up to date with the latest cutting edge skills the future might needs. Many cool gadgets we have seen today were not even exist in the past decades, and also things like nano-particles were developed rapidly. This condition indicated the fast growing development of science and technology where kids today need to keep updates so they might used to convert their playing time into more study and creative thinking. This is the case because the future jobs requires people to master many skills and abilities with a more complicated things likes data science or data analysis. This resulting in juvenile today will have to do more homeworking and attending into a lot extracurricular activities rather than kids in the '90s.
It is also fair to say the parents want their kids to be better than them, so it might cause the children to be forced out into a lot of activities that might be too many for their ages. Parents who were born in the late '90s might not have a lot of pressure when they were kids to learn many things as technology were not developed rapidly during that ages. But for now, these millenial parents might rethink their kids to learn as many extracuricullar items as early as posssible to prepare the better future for them. For example, learning artificial inttellegence might be too sophisticated in the past, but now it become necessary as for now it has already been the integral part of our society as we use them in our daily activities, like when we are paying our bills or groceries or scanning the barcodes.
In conclusion, we might dislike the idea of children having a little time play but the future demands more set of skills they need to master. Therefore, they need to do a lot of study harder and attending various extra lessons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this statement' or 'these statements'?
Suggestion: this statement; these statements
...willing to do. Personally, I agree with these statement as the demand for future generation ski...
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Line 2, column 723, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gs likes data science or data analysis. This resulting in juvenile today will have t...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...o sophisticated in the past, but now it become necessary as for now it has already bee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, therefore, as for, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81445783133 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57080993556 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479518072289 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7361220944 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.714285714 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6428571429 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219883366613 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885532702634 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889560668927 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169088193516 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917687934178 0.0645574589148 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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