Many students starting university must choose a major, and parents of these students often give them advice about which major to choose. Some parents tell their children to choose the major that most interests the students, other parents tell students that it is best to choose a major that will lead to a job with a high salary, even if that major may not be the one that most interests the students. Which approach do you believe is better and why?
High school graduation is one of the most critical point of someone’s life because they have to select a university major around many choices. This phase would be important for their future. Parents may have their own assumption to advice their children in selecting the courses and sometimes force their kids to accept what they believe. Personally, I believe these graduated school students have the ability to make their own decision. These including to follow their own research on the selected major and choose a major that might seems unpopular.
On selecting their child’s university, parents may have suggestion or may even a coercion to follow their option. Parents my think they acknowledge many information to supplement their thought based on their experience in the past. This might not be the case if these parents did not update on recent trend on the career job or in other words, they just relied on anything happen in the past. For example, being a doctor might sound prestigious in the past but for now it becomes common profession. Another thing, being a Petroleum Engineer might be cool 10 years ago due to its higher salary comparatively to other industry. For now, it is difficult to find the job in this field. I believe parent’s input might be influential, but students have to make their own decision based on their own thinking and research.
On choosing a major, students have to believe on their own future goals, even if the major is not having a bright prospect in the future. They should have the passion and eagerness to take any major they have chosen. They should have their own believe they must be successful in the future by selecting the major. Even if the job leads to a high salary prospect, if there is no willingness and not passionate about the subject, the results will not be satisfying. In other case, some jobs that in 10 years ago was not being considered like IT industry, now becomes the most popular one so that, the future is uncertain, some jobs that is currently trending, might disappear in the future. Therefore, instead of choosing a major with bright future prospect, these students should choose any major based on their passion and future goals.
To sum up, high school students have the ability to make their own decision about their future. Parents make take in place to offer some feedback but it should be in a suggestive manner, not to force them to follow their will.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...tion. Parents my think they acknowledge many information to supplement their thought...
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Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...tion. Parents my think they acknowledge many information to supplement their thought based on th...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...about the subject, the results will not be satisfying. In other case, some jobs that in 10 ye...
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Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a suggestive manner" with adverb for "suggestive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...to offer some feedback but it should be in a suggestive manner, not to force them to follow their will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, another thing, for example, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82380952381 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51281973857 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447619047619 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2333623946 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294551868285 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101927140011 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817835048937 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199482683806 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475299600992 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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