Imagine that you have been allowed to advise the government of a city or region area that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or r

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Imagine that you have been allowed to advise the government of a city or region (area) that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region. Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or region? Why? 1. Providing more affordable housing; 2. Reducing air and water pollution ; 3. Attracting new businesses to the city or region

As if I had the chance to propose an advice to the authorities in my region, I would suggest them to limit and preventing the air and water pollution rather than proceeding a more cheap house nor invting more investors in the town. Sustainability and environmental issue would be a huge issue the government need to adress and tacke carefully to make the town can sustain the more ecological and healthy life in the future, where the next generation can also breathe the fresh air and drink a clean water.

The needs for more residential areas might rise in these days as the people grew more kids. Unfortunately, to build a new housing complex, government needs another sourcing funds to accomodate date. Beside of that, more green areas will have to be converted in residential areas due to limited amount of available land compared to the increasing number of people, especially in urbanized city. That is way, adding more houses will not solve the problem, and because of that, the city's governor must urge its people to not building a new houses and promoting environmental friendly program instead.

Inviting more investors to relocate their money in the city might make the development of the city faster. More building will be added to support business activities and more taxes will be generated from them. I believe this might be good for one side of the coin, but the implication of these activity might harm the environment. As people were now much aware of global warming, these investing activity might turning the park into skyscrapper and induce the use of CFC (Cloro-Fluoro Carbon), a gas emitted by the use of AC (air conditioner) to the atmosphere. These gas cause the green house effect and resulting the rise of global temperature and might harm the planet's surface.

Based on the previouse statements, I personally believe the green environment program should be a priority program the government have to concern about. It simply because to preserves the natural habitat for the ecosystem can sustain the current world descending to the future generation. A green program like developing a lot of green space aroung the city should promoted rather a more economic and money-oriented program. Although this program does not instantly generate more income to the government, it would make an added value to the city when the authorities promote to the investors. In addition, investors today would also look for the place that already having a master plan of green program because they are also have concern about the future.

To conclude, although government could build a more house to its people and attracting more businessman to the town, I believe promoting an environmental program to preserves air and water should be a first priority for them to make the city become a sustainable environment for the future generation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
As if I had the chance to propose an advice to the authorities in my region, I woul...
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Line 1, column 492, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'clean water'.
Suggestion: clean water
...an also breathe the fresh air and drink a clean water. The needs for more residential area...
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Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this activity' or 'these activities'?
Suggestion: this activity; these activities
...ide of the coin, but the implication of these activity might harm the environment. As people w...
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Line 7, column 727, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... of green program because they are also have concern about the future. To conclud...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01473684211 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78372316897 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492631578947 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.8932357423 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.117647059 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9411764706 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52941176471 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212237903717 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748069755613 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440337003845 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122205810783 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222499918954 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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