In some countries, high school or college students have jobs. Do you think this is a good idea? Give reasons and details to support your answer.
The topic, whether it is a good idea for the students to work while studying in school or college is a great interest of debate. A few might believe that it's not a good idea however, as far as I am concerned, I agree that it is a great idea. I will evaluate the reasons in the following passage.
To begin with, earning some money while studying at school or college would make them independent. In other words, they do not have to ask for money, they can readily use their earnings for their expenditures. These days colleges or high schools organize various trips or educational programs and for which they need to deposit a fee so, instead of asking from their parents or caregiver, they could easily use the money that they earn doing the job. My individual life is a compelling example of this. During my freshman year in university, I worked as a part-time computer tutor, hence I could earn a good amount of money for my daily expenses and on top of that, I had enough time for my study. This demonstrates how effective it is to work while being a student.
Further, doing a part-time job could give a break from the daily study schedule. What I mean is that sometimes, studies become too hectic or stressful and you could feel drained out and exhausted so, in such circumstances, a part-time job would rejuvenate and freshen up our brain thus, it can maintain a balance in our life. In addition to that, we get to mingle with a diverse group of people. For instance, when I was in my high school days during my final year, I worked in a local library near my home and I made lots of new friends there as well as I got to learn some computer skills too. It didn't simply give me some money It also improved my communication skills. According to the recent survey conducted by a local university, students who do the job are more likely to get better jobs after their studies than those who simply attend school or college.
In conclusion, because of these two reasons, I feel that It is a good idea to have a job while studying in school or college.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i feel, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, in other words, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46578947368 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53470509466 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4258610013 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0625 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203583463716 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714567448046 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429869428002 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138413987076 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319639883281 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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