In some countries teenager have jobs while they are still students. Do you think it is a good idea? Support your opinion by specific reasons and details to support your answer.
One of the most crucial achievements is knowledge which can be obtained by two main methods, one is experiencing another is attaining information by theoretically in universities, colleges, and high school. In my point of view, I personally believe that teens should not be working during their academic period because of its potency to distract for the curiosity of their interest and they may face the problem of failing classes.
First and foremost, financial problem is the most common problem for every student especially those high-school teenagers, even though, they had the better focus on their further career by recognizing their interests through exploring many curriculums, including calculus, physics, art science, and biology. Comparison of earnings between the part-time job, most teenagers willing to work by sacrificing their precious lessons with the professional job after the long period of academic studies, is incomparable. For example, Bob, one of my friends, used to work in Mcdonalds as dishwasher instead of studying hard in order to enroll top-notch university. As a result, he ended up his high-school without purpose, dreams, and vision which are the considered as the most valuable trigger for anyone to study and employ by their own aspire.
Furthermore, most students, who work during their period of study, instead of trying hard to understand and accomplish their curriculums, tend to fail the courses indisputably. My own experience is a compelling example of it. When I was in freshman year of my university years, I used to work website front-end developer in a small startup company. Even though I have learned many things about the website designing, nothing of it was related with my university curriculums. In consequences, I failed half of my courses that had taken on that semester then I despaired that losing my parent’s faith in me to accomplish university with good grades.
Although many people think that having a part-time job along with school year is a good idea, I strongly disagree with the following statement. Regardless of how many advantages it has, disadvantages and consequences outweigh its advantages. It can delay one’s high-school, college, and university years. Also, dire consequences of it can spoil desires and inquisitiveness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39502762431 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12607723871 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596685082873 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7621316483 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.2 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0561656007724 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0188146305102 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314115541785 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0364318240857 0.150856017488 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211116855233 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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