In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

Every individual who is busy with learning has to focus on learning and not to be worried about anything else. Simultaneously one should be assured about financial needs. Some of students are relying on their family and dot have to think about their expenses, but some else, they have to pay for their expenses and maybe for their family. It not only doesn’t hurt their learning process, but also has some other benefits like getting experience, improving their social interactions and an assurance about their expenses. So it is good and necessary for them to have a part time job.

We need to have experience to be successful in our field. But if we make learning a priority and getting experience after that, we have to spend a long time to acquire the possession we want. By a manipulation in our schedule, we can handle both- part time job and learning- and approach our goals sooner than what other expect. So when we are graduated we are also experienced and ready for recruiting in job we are yearned for.

From the other hand, for a successful business we need to have an improved social interaction. We should improve our social reaction to know the people who are in need to us and know how we can serve them. If we only grapple with learning, when we are done with our education, we know nothing about our society and its needs. In that case, we can only act as a book which is full of scientific information but we don’t know where we should use these information. During working we can recognize the odds that should be improved by our knowledge. What better if we discern these opportunities during our learning and move faster and more motivated toward our responsibilities?

As a student, if we are not assured about our expenses, even if we have a lot of free time that can be used for learning, still we can’t focus on studying. This mental disturbance causes our free time and reading not to be useful. We can spend less time on studying but with an assured feeling. This short time can be more effective and useful for our learning process.

We can easily witness a lot of laborious students who has passed their education period with misery and hardworking, but are more successful comparing with some of those who had an occasion circumstance for learning but aren’t happy with their life. Because they aren’t into trying and don’t know have to handle problems. So it is so hard for them to control the situation. In conclusion it is perfect to manage our time and have a part time job during our learning process.

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Average: 5.6 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the students') or simply say ''Some students''.
Suggestion: Some of the students; Some students
...hould be assured about financial needs. Some of students are relying on their family and dot hav...
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Line 1, column 574, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...s good and necessary for them to have a part time job. We need to have experience to b...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...on in our schedule, we can handle both- part time job and learning- and approach our goal...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
... we don't know where we should use these information. During working we can recognize the o...
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Line 9, column 448, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...s perfect to manage our time and have a part time job during our learning process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, as to, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.5418719212 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 6.10837438424 262% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 8.36945812808 299% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 5.94088669951 202% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 67.0 20.9802955665 319% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 31.9359605911 169% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1207.87684729 176% => OK
No of words: 452.0 242.827586207 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71238938053 5.00649968141 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 3.92707691288 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69854919355 2.71678728327 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 139.433497537 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446902654867 0.580463131201 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 379.143842365 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.6157635468 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.71428571429 350% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.931034482759 430% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 12.6551724138 182% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0207107178 50.4703680194 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6086956522 104.977214359 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.9669160288 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21739130435 7.25397266985 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 6.9802955665 229% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0759401318092 0.242375264174 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311038654863 0.0925447433944 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343433417388 0.071462118173 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0541564433704 0.151781067708 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270687232474 0.0609392437508 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 12.6369458128 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.5310837438 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32886699507 92% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 55.0591133005 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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