in some countries teenagers have jobs while they are still students. do you think this is a good idea?

Teenager period of people life is very critical and lively that makes the destination of life and future. Going to school and studying the basic subjects is a major business of this era. The most and majority of teenager go to school and just study to become familiar to all aspect of life, but in some cases in the developing and poor countries, poor people and weak culture people avoid their children from going to school and make them to work and make income for their families. In addition, there are some teenagers that have job and work while they are still student due to being poor and having a misery circumstance in their life. At all, having job while being student is not acceptable.

In this period of life, a student should spend all her or his power and energy on studying, developing thought and making his or her future. Because this age and period is the basic period that children get ability of discerning the good things from bad things and know the reason of life and creation. The goals of everyone’s life are specified and the plans for achieving goals are planned in this time. For example: if we ask people about their achievements, they surely response that “I set my goals when I was teenager and studying in school”. So, in order to have a developed generation, we should avoid them from working in this age.

Working and having job makes income, compared studying that needs money. This could be the reason of abandonment of studying and school and destroying the future of them. Because money is delicious against studying and going to school which is boring. I have seen many students after getting job leave school and put them only on their working and earning money. Apparently, having job is much more acceptable and interesting than getting knowledge for teenager.

As the result, the whole life of people is the result of teenager period of life and studying is the only way that helps us to make a bright future. So, teenager should just study, improve their talent, make beautiful thought and set their goals, not working and getting money.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, if, so, still, while, for example, in addition, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7698630137 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42405224238 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465753424658 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8596758287 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.411764706 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179104106556 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704853218753 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686663297726 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109695282533 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053112953255 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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